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		<title>The Evolution of Rejection</title>
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		<description><![CDATA[Enduring and surviving rejection is part of every writer’s successful career. Rejection letters can be part of a writer’s toolkit to success. This comes from objectively perceiving them as opportunities in a long process of relationship-building and the business of writing and publishing.
Writers often witness an evolution in rejection letters as they learn more about [...]]]></description>
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<p>Enduring and surviving rejection is part of every writer’s successful career. Rejection letters can be part of a writer’s toolkit to success. This comes from objectively perceiving them as opportunities in a long process of relationship-building and the business of writing and publishing.</p>
<p>Writers often witness an evolution in rejection letters as they learn more about their craft and about their markets. The ability to recognize the evolutionary steps can be useful in determining your next move in that particular market.</p>
<p>Below I describe one sequence of a manuscript’s evolutionary path. These don’t necessarily follow a chronological path for any particular manuscript; nor am I suggesting that your personal writer’s path will follow this particular pattern. Take these for what they may represent to you for any particular manuscript’s journey to success.</p>
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<li><strong>Lowest form</strong>: the form-letter, with no name or signature—you get no information from this except that they’re probably swamped with submissions. File the letter and try them again with another story; you can even play a game of it to see how many submissions it takes to get “recognized”. Meantime send the rejected story elsewhere.</li>
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<li><strong>Next lowest form</strong>: Personalized form letter with your name on it and a name and signature on it. Congratulations! You are now a person. And you will likely be remembered when you submit another story here.</li>
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<li><strong>Higher on the Evolutionary Path</strong>: a form letter that includes a personalized note about your work and why it was rejected (often with an added comment about the story or your writing). You have made a mark. Try them again!</li>
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<li><strong>Even Higher on the Evolutionary Path</strong>: a personalized letter that explains why your story was rejected—this says as much about the editor as it does about how they felt about your story; that they are taking the time to write to you and give you suggests means you are worth their valuable time. You have an opportunity to begin a relationship with this editor. Play fair.</li>
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<li><strong>Highest on the Path</strong>: a personalized, perhaps even handwritten, note that specifies why they rejected your piece with suggestions for revision (and resubmission) or invitation to submit another piece. Congratulations! This is the beginning of a relationship. Revise and resubmit.</li>
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		<description><![CDATA[Here are five things that I guarantee will improve your story:
1. Voice: This is the feel and tone that applies to the overall book (narrative voice) and to each character. The overall voice is dictated by your audience, who you’re writing for: youth, adults, etc. It’s important to give each character a distinctive &#8220;voice&#8221; (including [...]]]></description>
			<content:encoded><![CDATA[<p><a href="http://www.thepassionatewriter.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/11/Old_book_bindings_cropped.jpg"><img class="alignleft size-medium wp-image-5542" title="Old_book_bindings_cropped" src="http://www.thepassionatewriter.com/wp-content/uploads/2008/11/Old_book_bindings_cropped-300x300.jpg" alt="Old book bindings cropped 300x300 Five Ways to Improve Language in Your Writing" width="300" height="300" /></a>Here are five things that I guarantee will improve your story:</p>
<p>1. <strong>Voice:</strong> This is the feel and tone that applies to the overall book (narrative voice) and to each character. The overall voice is dictated by your audience, who you’re writing for: youth, adults, etc. It’s important to give each character a distinctive &#8220;voice&#8221; (including use of distinct vernacular, use of specific expressions or phrases, etc.). This is one way a reader can identify a character and find them likeable—or not. In a manuscript I recently reviewed, I noticed that the characters spoke in a mixture of formal and casual speech. This confuses the reader and bumps them out of the &#8220;fictive dream&#8221;. Consistency is very important for readers. They will abandon a story whose writing is not consistent. So, my advice to this writer was to pick one style for each character and stick to it. Voice includes what a character says. It incorporates language (both speech and body movements), philosophy, humor. How a character looks, walks, talks, laughs, is all part of this. Let’s take laughter for instance: does your character tend to giggle, titter, chortle, guffaw, belly-laugh? Do any of your characters have conflicts with one another? Either through differences in opinions, agendas, fears, ambitions… etc. One learns so much from the kind of interaction a character has with his/her surroundings (whether it’s another character or a scene).</p>
<p>2. <strong>Point of View (POV):</strong> Many beginner’s novels are often told through no particular POV. Many first manuscripts often start in the omniscient POV (that of the narrator) and ever so often may lapse into one of the character’s POV briefly. This makes for very &#8220;telling vs showing&#8221; type of writing (not to mention being inconsistent again). 90% of writers do not write this way because it tends to be off-putting, it distances the reader from the characters, and is very difficult to achieve and be consistent with. Most writers prefer to use limited third person POV (told from one or a few key characters; that is, you get into the head and thoughts of only a few people: all the observations are told through their observations, what they see, feel and think). This bonds the reader to your characters and makes for much more compelling reading. I would highly suggest you adopt this style. That’s not to say that you can’t use several POVs… just not at the same time; it is the norm to use chapter or section breaks to change a POV.</p>
<p>3. <strong>Passive vs. Active Verbs</strong>: beginners often use a lot of passive verbs (e.g., were, was, being, etc.). Some use too may modifiers. Try to find more active verbs. Many writers fall into the pattern of using verbs that are weak and passive (and then adding a modifier to strengthen it…it doesn’t). Actively look for strong, vivid verbs. This is a key to good writing. I can’t emphasize this enough. For instance, which version is more compelling: ‘she walked quickly into the room’ or ‘she stormed into the room’?</p>
<p>4. <strong>Show, Don’t Tell</strong>: this is partly a function of POV and use of active verbs. Once you change to 3rd person, much of this will naturally resolve itself. An example of telling vs. showing is this: [He was in a rage and felt betrayed. "You lied, Clara," he said angrily, grabbing her hand.] instead, you could show it: [His face smoldered. "You lied, Clara," he roared, lunging for her.] Telling also includes large sections of exposition, either in dialogue or in narrative. This happens a lot in beginning writer’s stories. It takes courage and confidence to say less and let the reader figure it out. Exposition needs to be broken up and appear in the right place as part of the story. Story is paramount. &#8220;Telling&#8221; is one of the things beginning writers do most and editors will know you for one right away. Think of the story as a journey for both writer and reader. The writer makes a promise to the reader that s/he will provide a rip-roaring story and the reader comes on side, all excited. This is done through a confident tease in the beginning and slow revelation throughout the story to keep it compelling. Exposition needs to be very sparingly used, dealt out in small portions.</p>
<p>5. <strong>Unclutter your Writing</strong>: There is a Mennonite adage that applies to writing: &#8220;less is more&#8221;. Sentences in early works tend to be full of extra words (e.g., using &#8220;ing&#8221; verbs, add-ons like &#8220;he started to think&#8221; instead of simply &#8220;he thought&#8221;). Cut down the words in your paragraphs (often in the intro chapters) by at least 20%. Be merciless; you won’t miss them, believe me, and you will add others later in your second round of edits.</p>
<p>This article is an adapted excerpt from <em>The Fiction Writer: Get Published, Write Now!</em></p>

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